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Old March 17th, 2008, 09:56   #232
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For that level it seems fine. The grammer needs a lot of work, but that's okay in a rough draft.

It only shows a limited research ability (from what I can tell) as it looks like your only sources were the internet or anecdotal. If you could fine some journal or book sources it could be very strong.

Being self-referential in an academic paper is usually a no-no and reserved for more casual writing.

Look forward to reading your conclusions.

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